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Pitch for Sombre Inheritance (working title)
Tilda is entirely focussed on getting a first in her forthcoming final exams, until an anonymous letter informs her that the grandparents who brought her up have lied to her throughout her life: her parents didn’t, in fact, both die in a car accident.
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This discussion was modified 3 days, 6 hours ago by Cassie Oakman.
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This discussion was modified 3 days, 6 hours ago by
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2 Replies
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Hi Cassie,
I like the idea of an anonymous letter interrupting Tidla’s intensive study period, especially when it contains information that will turn her life upside down. Her grandparents who raised her have kept a secret about her parents. Where are her parents? Why is Tilda with her grandparents? Why did they leave her? And what is behind the lies? This has family drama all over it and it is intriguing and raises all these questions. However, I’m not really getting full thriller vibes from the pitch. The anonymous letter (whoever wrote it) has Thriller potential. Is this a malicious thing, or a letter with good intentions?
So I think the pitch might need to leave out the exam studies, and be reworked to something like:
Final Year Student, Tilda, receives an anonymous letter that tells her the parents she thought dead are alive, and that her beloved grandparents who raised her have lied to her. Tilda must find the letter writer to discover the truth…
My effort isn’t quite right either. We need a sense of real jeopardy for Tilda – something that raises the stakes and tells us this investigation is dangerous for Tilda.
Kate
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Hi Cassie,
It’s an interesting premise and I think you need to give the reader a little more. What are the consequences for example of finding out this information? Messing up exams is probably not enough to sustain the whole book, but could the timing have more dire consequences – wedding plans, relocation to another country, finding she might have siblings etc.
I look forward to seeing a bit more information unfolded!
